"Stray god" is a great image/pun. I like this a lot, it has a kind of spiritual feeling to it, yet still feels tangible and real. The only thing I'm not sure about is the first line, "stayed" just feels rather abstract to me.
stray god was a nasty typo, and stayed was missing something. triple checks from now on. it is odd that stayed is more abstract to you than god... in a haiku that is.
It can't be a typo, it's a great image! "Stayed" is more abstract because it doesn't have any modifiers or attributes. "God" would be abstract as well, but "stray god" sounds entirely different (it might not be 100% pure haiku imagery, but it just works). But YMMV.
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But the haiku is good none the less, especially then pun on dog/god.
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