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it's snowing!
cherry petals
and bees



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sneži!
češnjeve cvetove
in čebele



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©2006-2009 ~KorpiHunaja
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Submitted: April 20, 2006
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spring.

the slovene original has a bit of onomatopoeia [ž-č-š-č], suggesting a slight wind through the trees. not quite a direct translation as with most of my other haiku. the original does not have cherry petals but cherry blossoms.
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!inziladun:iconinziladun: Apr 20, 2006, 4:07:12 PM
oh beautiful. haha! what wonderful juxtaposition, and mild action

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`MSJames:iconMSJames: Apr 20, 2006, 6:37:51 PM
I love the snow/blossom relationship and you've come upon a great combination.

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=Tuishimi:iconTuishimi: Apr 20, 2006, 10:42:00 PM
Oooo! Love this one. Talk about a complete image in just a few words! Wow.

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~KorpiHunaja:iconKorpiHunaja: Apr 21, 2006, 2:12:59 AM
glad you liked it, this one i had the most doubts about. come to think of it, this is not that uncommon with my haiku. :)
~KorpiHunaja:iconKorpiHunaja: Apr 21, 2006, 2:15:04 AM
so few i had serious doubts about it. thanks.
*Esin:iconEsin: Apr 22, 2006, 9:56:21 PM
:clap:

I love the combination of cherry petals and bees!

More honey, please. :nod:
*diamondie:icondiamondie: Apr 23, 2006, 4:20:06 AM
You really get a feeling of awe from this poem and even though cherry trees are a bit of a clichéd image it doesn't feel trite in this context. Great work. The only thing I'd change is to combine the last two lines, the linebreak just seems too abrupt to me.
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